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my riff - "Batman the Animated Series - Beware the Grey Ghost"
« on: November 14, 2008, 04:57:50 PM »
this is my first fan-riff of anything. It sucks.  :-[ 

Parts 1 + 2
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UkrQMP5bPnc
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=idJzQQLtb-w
I hate my voice. But I'm kinda proud of the writing.

If anyone thinks they can riff this better, the episode and my transcript can be downloaded below.
If you manage to put my vids to shame, I'll gladly delete them.

transcript:
http://www.freewebtown.com/thiev/Grey%20Ghost%20Fanriff.txt
Grey Ghost episode:
http://rapidshare.com/files/163846155/Batman_-_Beware_the_Grey_Ghost.avi
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Re: my riff - "Batman the Animated Series - Beware the Grey Ghost"
« Reply #1 on: November 14, 2008, 09:28:03 PM »
I thought it was actually pretty good.

Favourite line: "I admire their response time, but cops can't actually arrest fire." Very clever. :)
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Re: my riff - "Batman the Animated Series - Beware the Grey Ghost"
« Reply #2 on: November 16, 2008, 01:40:45 PM »
I thought it was actually pretty good.



So did I.  Just watched it.   I thought your writing, voice, timing, and delivery were all good. Very impressive for a first time.  This should be on iriffs.


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Re: my riff - "Batman the Animated Series - Beware the Grey Ghost"
« Reply #3 on: November 16, 2008, 02:43:12 PM »
This should be on iriffs.

Unless he's paid Warner Brothers for the rights to show the video, he can't. The file he's posted on YouTube is technically illegal. It certainly can't be sold on iRiffs. Basically he would have to release it as an mp3, and his only audience would be someone who happens to already own BtAS on DVD.
« Last Edit: November 16, 2008, 03:26:24 PM by Chaos »
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Re: my riff - "Batman the Animated Series - Beware the Grey Ghost"
« Reply #4 on: November 16, 2008, 02:52:20 PM »
This should be on iriffs.

Unless he's paid Warner Brothers for the rights to show the video, he can't. The file he's posted on YouTube is technically illegal. It certainly can't be sold on iRiffs. Basically he would have to release it as an mp3, and his only audience would be someone who happens to already own BtAS on DVD.

Aren't there already a couple of mp3 tv show iriffs?  If Star Trek can do it, why not Batman?
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Re: my riff - "Batman the Animated Series - Beware the Grey Ghost"
« Reply #5 on: November 16, 2008, 03:27:00 PM »
Oh, I'm not saying it can't be done. I'm just saying sales are basically guaranteed to be low.
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Re: my riff - "Batman the Animated Series - Beware the Grey Ghost"
« Reply #6 on: November 16, 2008, 04:09:02 PM »
My internet is really lame right now, so I can't watch the whole thing, but so far it'spretty good! Good job. My only complaint is a bit of a lack of energy. You don't seem all that happy to be doing this, almost apologetic. Most new riffers do this. Just make sure you get over that.
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Re: my riff - "Batman the Animated Series - Beware the Grey Ghost"
« Reply #7 on: November 20, 2008, 01:12:36 PM »
My internet is really lame right now, so I can't watch the whole thing, but so far it'spretty good! Good job. My only complaint is a bit of a lack of energy. You don't seem all that happy to be doing this, almost apologetic. Most new riffers do this. Just make sure you get over that.

Seriously. Check out one of my first ones here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-kWKT4S22Eg
The jokes are okay but the sound is awful and really that's something I am still working on.  It's an ongoing process. 


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Re: my riff - "Batman the Animated Series - Beware the Grey Ghost"
« Reply #8 on: November 20, 2008, 01:39:45 PM »
Dude, this was really funny! And yeah, you got a good riffing voice, you just need to add a bit more gutso. I'm looking forward to more things from you!


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Re: my riff - "Batman the Animated Series - Beware the Grey Ghost"
« Reply #9 on: January 24, 2009, 01:18:22 PM »
I thought it was okay, my biggest problem with it is probably the commentary volume level. It probably doesn't help that I'm 70% deaf, but your best scene is the beginning.



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